Spackle's OC Rating Thread

NAMEAh, when the naming strategy of mid 30s lower class women and late teenage males collide. We have Misty spelled incorrectly to try and be unique, and a butchering of Symphony and Horny. I wonder how much cheetah print I will be exposed to in this entry. SEXSPECIESBODY COLOURMANE COLOUREYE COLOUROK if your ears are always down then you are just spending your entire life with the equine equivalent of resting bitch face. Only instead of looking bitchy you just look like you’re scared of everything, likely including your own shadow. How the hell can anyone take you seriously with that. FOALHOOD.This might expose me as the boomer I am but this hits too close to home. This is the exact OPPOSITE OF JUST FOR SHOW. This is important shit right here. This is interesting! This is unique! We haven’t gotten past your background and you already have more potential than most of the OCs that pass through this door have. Please expand upon this, I wanna know the who what when wheres and whys about this marking. I wanna know what your character feels about the marks. I get that you say they are just for show, is that what your character thinks? Does your character wear it like fashion unaware of the deeper implications of what it actually means? There’s so much potential here I don’t want it to be squandered. Here’s a sentence telling you to watch Firefly if you haven’t already. I would like the character sheet for this absolute chad submitted here. I wanna know how he manages to grant anything someone wants, or is he just a really good con artist? HmmmmBut really this is weak and lacks any specific detail. Needs to be expanded. CUTIE MARKI’d hope not since there’s nothing in the backstory that tells me anything remotely close to being involved with swords. CUTIE MARK STORYWait wait wait hold on here for a second. You’re trying to tell me that you ran away from home with very little food, went out into the middle of nowhere to practice HEMA by yourself, and at the end the only thing you learned was called thrusts while not being an idiot and that’s what gave you your cutie mark? What the hell about that is character defining? Is it the poor planning, poor execution, or the abysmal idea of being able to train yourself in using a sword when you don’t have the damndest clue on how to thrust in the first place? What the actual fuck is this supposed to represent for you? To me, it sounds like your cutie mark represents your willingness to stab yourself in the back for no reason and somehow still come out the other side alive. This is weak. Nothing says cutie mark like casually admitting to murder after being in the bush. PERSONALITYOh look, a personality that’s almost identical to mine.LIKESI see that your character is more interested in being perceived as cool rather than actually being cool. The obsessive training is more a front to be able to wrap a good story about how much effort that you put into your life while simultaneously not actually achieving all that much, isn’t it? DISLIKESWho the fuck doesn’t like eating. I can take surviving in the bush for 20 days without any survival training while supposedly training your HEMA techniques with no food and getting your cutie mark but disliking EATING!? That’s way too unrealistic. SKILLSDon’t have much to say here. Wanna be small and fast? Sure, no problem. Wanna be mediocre and not want to take advantage of one of the most important sections to lay out what makes your character interesting and worth taking the time out of my day to look it over? Sure, whatever. DETAILED HISTORYI love it when people do my job for me. Way to already acknowledge your flaws and laziness before stepping through the door. Can’t wait to see proof that this exists. God probably has more evidence to His existence than your character does to being interesting. This is the only thing I like about your character. I’d rather you show this through her actions or reactions rather than just telling me that she is X. Something something show don’t tell. Physical Attributes: 4Psychological Attributes: 2Historical Attributes: 2Unity: 1No extra points. Total: 9Verdict:Needs an overhaul, but some fundamental details can be recycledLooks good superficially but as soon as you go looking for any details or substance it turns into something more hollow than a cheap chocolate easter bunny. Supposedly you’ve spent a significant amount of time RP’ing with this character and you still can’t manage to regurgitate whatever forum vomit you participated in on this sheet? I wish I could take points away just to tell you to change your attitude and put more effort into your character than your character is putting into their life. Fucks sake.